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August 12th, 2014, 12:59 am

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BlooEyedSpazz,

August 12th, 2014, 12:59 am

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Oh my! lolz. ^_^

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Hakked,

August 12th, 2014, 2:09 am

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love that outfit!

Blackchick,

August 12th, 2014, 10:49 am

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LOL 'Lady Lava'! *wolf-whistle* I'm SO looking forward to this!

MecanicalCH,

August 12th, 2014, 11:14 am

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O.O OHhh...MY....GOD....*faints due to too much Fan service!*

R.Drey (Guest),

August 16th, 2014, 4:23 pm

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Not bad, not bad at all While I am a large fan of your costuming choices, I feel the need to speak about the more technical aspects of this comic.

Within the world of comics and webcomics it is oft problematic to express things such a sound, or music in this case, and what sort of feel a song lends to a scene. Coupled with the scenery you have, the flow of the visual notes, along with the character on an instrument give off a tone almost akin to Jazz. It's the small, and subtle elements that make this work so well. Even if you were not trying to denote Jazz, the visual still translates an ambiance where the music deepens the feeling of this particular place of business. In a way, the visual of the notes swirling almost like smoke upon bars and notes around the musician, and how it seems to 'break' from the panel borders is akin to one adding honey to a rich, and delectible tea...or creme to a quite sinfully delicious chocolate caffeinated beverage.

Speaking of panels, and flow, such are also common problems for every artist, no matter if they just started or have been working on comics for years. You took the traditional panel configuration, and added your own brand of style. Where there is a thick border here, a scene piece may intrude on a panel there. The eye of a reader, whilst looking at a page rich with detail, easily follows the movement and speach bubbles without a hint of confusion.

There is also the sense of time passing by. This is evident when the main lady of badassitude takes note of the stage, and then ensures that she takes the stage. The fact that the "..." panel is round, rather than square like the others, expresses something other than the secenery or characters. It removes the reader just enough to allow them to recognize that the dots aren't what a character is thinking, rather, they are a means to give a "silent narrative", I.E. having a narrator without needing one to speak directly in order to get one's point accross. All too often writers forget this tactic and go the easy route via spelling out exposition, or beating the audience over the head with it. (I.E. what happens in just about every Michael Bay flick). What you did was a savvy, simple, yet subtle tactic that may take us a little out of the immersion, but not so much that we lose interest all together. Well done.

All in all, you mixed your artwork, scenery, and panels in a way that narrate themselves. I'm pretty sure, that if the dialog were to be blanked out, we could still understand what is going on. Mind, that isn't a bad thing at all. In fact, it just shows that you have a budding talent in the artistry of storytelling which can only get better from here.

I look forward to see how you continue to advance in your style, as well as with the plot. (Another point I would love to talk about, but this comment has gone on long enough. Just to be short I'll say this: With only a few pages you were able to get your main characters backgrounds taken care of, show a slew of emotions and the connections between your characters, and have taken a tight hold in the interest of your readers in a quite short amount of time. Hell, by the second page my interest was piqued and your comic was added to my favorites que. That isn't something I tend to do so early on, specially since I am a huge fan of BeetleJuice, and the nostalgia the franchise brings. -Chuckle- Heck, you changed the origional plot to go into a radical direction and instead of incurring 'Nurd Raege', you caused excitement and gained a good following of fans.

Not bad. Not bad at all. All I see here in your work is talent, and a mountain of potential.


cheers for bringing the ghost with the most back. <3


(P.S. Lol dat rubber ducky doe.)

Koal,

March 30th, 2016, 3:26 am

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Ooops! You made a typo and accidentally typed it as "preformance" instead of "performance"

Yes, I'm aware this was posted two years ago.

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